0 30 - that high scream should be as low as possible
0 35 - the 'do your best warlord...' phrase should be slower IMO. i feel yrel as pretty strong and proud, but the pride just isn't here. also i don't like how she speaks warlord. the /r/ sound must be rougher.
0 42 - lol, that sound. it seems she's throwing up, not feeling kargath is rubbing a dick on her pussy
1 21 - i don't like this at all. i dont believe she is being fucked hard here
2 31 - i love that spit sound :kappa: 
3 02 - 'don't touch me you savage' - something's wrong with this phrase
3 23 - 'no please slow down' AWESOME!!! keep it in this direction
3 56 - the 2nd 'more?!' - i don't like the intonation. it's quite high. maybe she should try to say it with an abstracted tone, maybe even slightly mind-broken